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Man had
the sky in a bowl,
Earth on a plate
and the oceans in a cup.
Sitting down,  he took
his industrial-grey fork
and poked
the spinach-green forests;
from their broken leaves
neon-black stuffing
poured into the countryside.

Deciding too early to eat,
Man took the sky
and gulped it down
straight from the porcelain,
aether dribbled down his cheek
and Heaven was gone.

Earth now dystopian-lukewarm,
Man took his fork again
and broke the land
into smaller chunks,
War sauce was poured over the planet
and Man took a bite.
The battle spices burning his mouth,
he reached to the ocean.

Tongue nuclear-hot,
Man drank the coral-fizzy water.
But his grip on the sea floor
was lost,
the glass was dropped
and a cascade of post-ocean
washed Earth into
a grey, lifeless sludge.

Sighing in irritation,
Man binned Earth
and instead called up
for a Mars pizza.
NaPoWriMo Day 2.

Thought I'd go for a narrative poem today, with the general moral obviously being that ordering food is a lot easier than cooking.
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Somnolent-Droid Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013
Your artist's comment nearly killed me XD

Fun poem! I enjoyed.
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you! :)
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Somnolent-Droid Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013
You're welcome!
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Silent-Intrigant Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is very interesting and descriptive!
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Student Writer
I wanted to focus more on the narrative side of the poem for this piece, but I'm glad it is still descriptive :)
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Silent-Intrigant Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I see. That's good! My literature teacher always says that a good narrative has good description in it.
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